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Tip #437:  Language: 

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Tip # 437:  Language:  Aim for conciseness and clarity.  Notice these examples:

Wordy: 

It is the responsibility of our Production Department to see that it meets the requirements of our Sales Division.  (19 words)

Concise: 

Our Production Department must meet our Sales Division’s requirements.  (9 words)

Weekly Exercise:

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This week’s quiz:

Make this sentence more concise:

The collision had the effect of a destructive force on the duplicator. (12 words)

Reader's Comments:

Norman C. Berns commented on last week’s quote:  Perhaps Ms. Dennison needs an extra chapter on the difference between singular and plural.  The sentence should be rephrased, perhaps "New employees are trying to learn their jobs...."

But, sorry, "their" may be used by lots of folks, but it still ain't singular.

My comment:  Right you are, Mr. Berns.

Quote of the week:

“There are two ways of spreading light:  to be the candle or the mirror that reflects it.” (Edith Wharton, poet, 1916)

Answer to this week's exercise:

The collision destroyed the duplicator. (5 words)

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Eats, Shoots & Leaves: The Zero Tolerance Approach to Punctuation, author, Lynne Truss The Everything Resume Book by Steven Graber
On Writing Well: The Classic Guide to Writing Nonfiction , by William Knowlton Zinsser  The Gregg Reference Manual, by William A. Sabin 
The Elements of Style, by William Strunk, White, E. B. White  How to Take the Fog Out of Business Writing, by Robert Gunning, Richard A. Kallan (Contributor) 

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