Bull's Eye Business Writing TipsTip #462: Recommend actions ...These
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| Tip 462: Recommend
actions rather than refer to individual mental states.
For example: Use: We recommend names that parallel the age-old and pure qualities of the product. Do not use: We believe you should use…."
Or "We think," or "We imagine." |
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This week’s quiz:
| Please rewrite the
following:
Sales have
increased more than 20 percent. |
Comments:
Fox Cole commented on Tip #461:
I believe the use of "to" versus
"with" in this phrase is a style choice rather than a
matter of correct or incorrect usage. The Oxford English
Dictionary, 2 ed., lists both usages and includes examples of
both. The entry in its entirety is below. Please note the
examples dated 1713 and 1842.
13. a. in regard of or to, with regard to, as to the regard of,
in respect of, with respect or reference to.
c1477 Caxton Jason 35 The more parte of men haue no verite ne
loyaulte
as to the regard of loue. 1512 Helyas in Thoms Prose Rom. (1827)
III. 101
As to the regarde of my londe and duchi of Boulion, I give it
freely to
this valiaunt knight. 1599 Shakes. Hen. V, i. i. 77 In regard of
Causes
now in hand. 1680 Boyle Scept. Chem. iv. 219 There are divers
sorts of
compound Bodies, even in regard of all or some of their
Ingredients. 1713
Berkeley Hylas & Phil. i. Wks. 1871 I. 266, I speak with
regard to sensible
things only. 1747 Gould Eng. Ants 37 There does not seem to be
any
considerable Variation in regard of the Eggs. 1792 Monthly Rev.
May VIII.
77 In regard to the matter,+he had, no doubt, been misled. 1842
Grove
Corr. Phys. Forces 94 The world was believed fixed until+it was
found to
change its place with regard to them. 1869 Goulburn Purs.
Holiness viii.
66 Of the affinity between God and Man, in regard of man's wants
and God's
fulness.
Quote of the week:
"Imagination was given to man to compensate him for what he is not; a sense of humor to console him for what he is." (Francis Bacon)
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My suggestion: Do not use
"the reason is because" since because, which in
the sentence above, repeats the notion of cause, and it
should be replaced with "that."
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